phuketrichard wrote: ↑Tue Jan 22, 2019 9:00 am I held off commenting cause didn't want to come across as, "a hater" but have to agree .
The technical ability of the film maker is good, (except for some of the cutting) ...BUT...it made no sense at all to me
no theme, no story line
no beginning, middle, end

Off topic a bit but
this is an independent film which i truly enjoyed, ( much better than Joiles film) and that crappy Cambodian prison film)
beautifully filmed and has a great story line

Jamie_Lambo wrote: ↑Tue Jan 22, 2019 10:45 am i'm a fan of random weird shorts, that leave you thinking, WTF? and so i did enjoy it, i liked the random horror elements to it too,
i dont think small shorts like this always need a "storyline" because its too short to have a beginning/middle/end, theyre supposed to throw you in the middle of a story, then leave you guessing in the end, about what youve just watched and the back story behind the characters, and to what lead up to the moment of the start of the film, its left to your imagination, and thats what i like,
i think the only thing it was missing was some sort of shock incident or a bit more of a twist at the end to confuse the viewer a bit more,
great cinematography too mate keep it up @phnompenhsteve

phnompenhsteve wrote: ↑Tue Jan 22, 2019 11:11 am Hey thanks man
Yea,shorts are meant to be simple. making sure to have a beginning,middle,and an end can make it overcrowded quick and many shorts are literally just one or two scenes.
The beginning was supposed to be a bit more of a shocker, but after looking at the footage, it didn't turn out how I had hoped. My fault.
It definitely could have had a bit more story to it. but i just had some images in my head and decided to go with it.
I'm still a beginning filmmaker so it's all a learning experience.
But I appreciate any critique. Both positive and negative.

Jamie_Lambo wrote: ↑Tue Jan 22, 2019 10:45 am i'm a fan of random weird shorts, that leave you thinking, WTF? and so i did enjoy it, i liked the random horror elements to it too,
i dont think small shorts like this always need a "storyline" because its too short to have a beginning/middle/end, theyre supposed to throw you in the middle of a story, then leave you guessing in the end, about what youve just watched and the back story behind the characters, and to what lead up to the moment of the start of the film, its left to your imagination, and thats what i like,
i think the only thing it was missing was some sort of shock incident or a bit more of a twist at the end to confuse the viewer a bit more,
great cinematography too mate keep it up @phnompenhsteve

Magic Van wrote: ↑Tue Jan 22, 2019 12:20 pm I thought it was engaging enough. Keep at it!

phuketrichard wrote: ↑Tue Jan 22, 2019 9:00 am I held off commenting cause didn't want to come across as, "a hater" but have to agree .
The technical ability of the film maker is good, (except for some of the cutting) ...BUT...it made no sense at all to me
no theme, no story line
no beginning, middle, end

Off topic a bit but
this is an independent film which i truly enjoyed, ( much better than Joiles film) and that crappy Cambodian prison film)
beautifully filmed and has a great story line